Life saving Invention!!

[runningman]

Here is the idea that I have came up with and was wondering for some feedback from MN'ers. This is my company so don't worry about the webite because it is mine.... This is also the first time it has been viewed by the public. Hope you like it.

https://www.laser-aid.com

Oh ya it is patented in North America, Europe and China (japan as well)..haha

just looking for feedback

[lmmadic]

Re: Life saving Invention!!

wow thats a great idea. Like most great ideas it's pretty simple but delivers enormous benifits.
I believe this thing is going to make it big

need a partner in europe by any chance :wink:

[skahound]

Great idea although I hope a fire doesn't break out in a hall of mirrors. Those people would be fucked!

[thesightless]

Re: Life saving Invention!!

dude, im buying if you need some capital. lord knows i am always looking for a decent investment.

one word.

dormitories.

[toasty]

great idea, man. makes perfect sense. best of luck...

[daveman]

all i want is a hallway with some freaking lazer beams in it.

looks like you have something there.

from the site i couldn't tell how it actually works or is installed, but if you could learn to tie it into existing exit signs and emergency lights that are already required by code to be set in certain places and certain distances you could really simplfiy the process. possibly even sell of the idea to manufacturers of those building components and make royalties.

great product for the hearing impaired.

[hansh20]

Re: Life saving Invention!!

great idea, the best part of this is that you could be in a fire and it still looks like a party, hoping the dj is at the end of the light . jk, youre gonna be millionare with this if youre not by now.

[picklemonkey]

Great idea although I hope a fire doesn't break out in a hall of mirrors. Those people would be fucked!

:ROFLMAO:

definitely sounds like a great idea man... hope you don't mind a little criticism, but there's way too many ampersands on the pages. For example: in the Laser-Aid page, the solution sentence has four of them, and the Objective in the Objectives page has a sentence with four of them. I'd replace them with "and"s or reword the sentences to look less repeated

[runningman]

Re: Life saving Invention!!

^^ so true..haha.. gonna have to get on the website guys ass..that is what i am looking for.. i want someone to maybe say something that i haven't heard yet..thanks.

[picklemonkey]

Re: Life saving Invention!!

instead of changing them to "and" I suggest just omitting one of the two words linked between them, if synonymous with each other. examples:

• "evacuate & navigate"
  "effective & efficient"
  "efficient & effective"
  "...within existing exit signs & is activated with the..."
  "government & private buildings" is repeated twice in the same list on the Objectives page

too many synonyms... it just looks redundant. the rest simply look unprofessional. I'd almost go out on a line and say half the sentences need restructured... half of them sound like run-ons, some mis-use of wording (Advent, for example), and there isn't much white space. example:

• before:

  Advent of the laser has provided the perfect medium to solve two key problems plaguing the fire & rescue industry, the loss of lives & the loss of property due to fire

  after:

  LaserAid provides the ultimate solution for meeting the demands of the Fire and Rescue industry:[list:71b1a20dec]

• Minimizing potential harm to men and women
• Reducing property damage (though I don't understand why this is here )